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Sample IELTS Essays Corrected

Sample IELTS Essays Corrected

Samples of IELTS writing tasks that I’ve corrected for students are included here to help your preparation. You can see the corrected version of each essay and also all the changes I have made. By reading the sample tasks you can get ideas about how to write tasks better. In addition, you can see some of the common errors that students make and understand how the band score is influenced by these mistakes.

Example showing issues with Task Response and Cohesion and Coherence
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Alcohol abuse
Birth control
Job satisfaction
Museums should be enjoyable
Public health
Ads are more important then the real needs of the consumer
Alcohol abuse becoming common
Alcohol abuse in many nations
Alcohol abuse is becoming popular in many countries
Alcohol abuse is rising in many parts of the world
Alcohol is becoming popular
Are computers better then teachers
Are dangerous leisure activities good
Are pets good for old people
Are phones better then letters
Are tv ads useful
Are hand written letters good
Can the development in technology cause environmental problems
Changes the 21st century has on the world
Children playing sport
Consumer culture
Consumerism
Crimes
Does reading help imagination
Does the media have too much power
Environmental hazards
Exporting food to other nations
Flights for leisure
Food technology
Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world

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Instead of just giving money what should rich countries do to
help the poor
Is it better to travel abroad
Is it good that the world is highly interconnected
Job as supervisor in a oil company
Jobs for men and women
Lack of safe water in the world
Long term jobs
Obesity is rising
Punishments for each type of crime
Road traffic
Sense of community is being lost
Shoud there be fixed punishments for each crime
Should children with different backgrounds mix with other children
Should education prepare students for employment
Should higher education be available to students from rural areas
Should people drive private cars
Should people marry for love
Should people travel abroad
Should people travel abroad
Should university provide students with the skills needed in the workplace
Should wild animals be in zoos
Should young people be ambitious
Should young people have a gap year
Strict education systems
Technology will increase the gap of rich and poor
Teenagers behavior
Teenagers behavior is becoming worse
The effects advertisements have on teenagers
The effects technology has on the rich and poor
The number of plants and animals are declining
Ways humans are damaging earth
What is the best way to spread news
What is the favourite snack in supermarkets
When learning a language you should also learn about the whole culture
Why are more people eating fast food
Why do people like buying things
Why do people stay working for the same company all their life
Why is music so popular
Young people face a lot of pressure
Tourism
Young people going to the city

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37 thoughts on “Sample IELTS Essays Corrected”

  1. Hello Mike,

    I have emailed you an essay last week Friday. I was just wondering if you have received it?

    Thank you.

    Reply
    • Hi, I always return tasks within 24 hours. I emailed it on Friday and I just forwarded it again.
      Please let me know if yo uhave still not received it.

      Reply
  2. Hi Mike, 🙂 Why some essays make clear what are the point of view/solution (e.g This essay believes that the government should…) and others just mention what kind of essay it is (e.g This essay will explain why the advantages and disadvantages). Which one of them is better?

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  3. Dear Mike,

    I am interested in purchasing the bundle of 10 writing tasks, but because my self-study time is limited, so I am not going to send 10 of them at once for marking. Instead, I may send 1 task every 2 or 3 days . Would that be fine for you?
    Looking forward to your reply.

    Thanks,

    Reply
  4. And I have one simple question for you. After a month I should take the test and I think my time is not good enough for being good writer so if I remember templates can I get a good score in a short amount of time ?

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    • Yes, templates can quickly boost your score and get you on the right track. Try to be flexible with the way you sue them.
      Slight changes might be needed depending on the precise task instructions you are given

      Reply
  5. I think these materials are the best to correction your mistakes in writing essay. I found it quite useful and thank you for sharing sample essays which has been corrected.

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  6. I think is the best approach to avoid making mistakes in our writing by looking into mistakes made by other students and avoid repeating them in our work. Thanks for sharing sample essay corrected they are very useful.

    Reply
  7. Hi Mike
    Is it possible to get my essays checked earlier than 24 hours? Actually, I am planning to buy $30 package of 4 essays. But my exam is on next week so I am thinking what to do?

    Reply
    • 24 hours is the maximum, if you send me your tasks marked urgent I will try to do them within a few hours; my timezone is GMT+7 and I don’t work when sleeping.

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  8. Hello sir, I’m really interested in your service!! Before I make a payment could you please give a brief comment on my essay below? Thank you so much!

    Question:
    【【【We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we he more auspicious of their benefits?】】】

    Computers have been widely used in many different areas. While we benefit from the convenience they brought us and actively seek for other ways computer programmes may help us in the future, the possible disadvantages of our growing dependence on them should not be ignored.

    It is conceivable that computers will become involved in more occupations. In the legal sector, for instance, routine jobs such as contract drafting can be computer-aided. Programmes are able to generate legal documents much faster than people do, as they can apply templates and search for appropriate legal references from the database or the internet within seconds. In addition, computer-controlled systems may be commonly applied to motor vehicles, such as cars, buses and trains. This does not only save your time for travelling as computer-controlled cars will follow the quickest route without misreading the GPS map and losing its direction, but also prevents accidents caused by driving under the influence of alcohol or fatigue.

    We definitely expect computers to further benefit our lives, but the risks of our increasing reliance on computers are alarming. We all have had the experience of programme crashing when documents had not been saved. This may evolve into a more serious problem when crucial missions are handed to them. Imagine an unmanned bus driven by a computer goes out of control due to an unexpected error occurring in the system, an unavoidable car crash will take away many people’s lives because computers are unable to handle unpredicted events. Whereas a driver, in this situation, might be able to quickly come up with a strategy based on his or her driving experience, thus minimizes the damage.

    Computers have offered us a myriad of benefits. However, it is important that we find the right balance as to how much they should intervene human lives. People should stay conscious and take the worst scenario into consideration before we become further dependent on computers.

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  9. Hi Mike,
    I’m Annie. Could you tell me the phrase “live on their own” means someone chooses to not marry and live alone or it means people who just care about their own families (selfish) and do not care and help others in society.
    Thanks.

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  10. Hello Mike,

    I have written my essay on a piece of paper, can I send the pictures of it as an attachment in an email or directly on Skype? I also want a feedback on my writing as it is not very good.

    Thank You!

    Reply
  11. Thank you for sharing sample essays corrected here. I think it is the best way to improve our writing skill by looking through mistakes made by other students and trying not to make the same mistake.

    Reply

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