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Writing Correction Service

IELTS writing correction and feedback on your mistakes from an examiner.

Getting your IELTS writing correction by a trained examiner is one of the effective ways to improve your writing. I will check your writing and give you feedback on errors and ways to improve your writing. My correction service includes task 2 essays, task 1 academic reports, and task1 general letters.

What I will do:

  • I will correct and point-out your English errors and include explanations of the main problems. I will give you tips to make your writing better.
  • I will give scores for the four criteria (Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resource, and Grammar and I will give you an overall IELTS score
  • I will include some overall advice about your essay and its structure.
Process for correction

1. Make a payment for my IELTS writing correction. Any four tasks for $30:

http://www.ieltsanswers.com/payment-ielts.html

2. Email me your writing task. This can be in the following formats: ms-word, pdf, photo of a handwritten task. I suggest you send your tasks one at a time, so that you can use the feedback from each task to improve the subsequent task.

examiner@ieltsanswers.com

3. Choosing Tasks. You can select your own task questions or choose them from here:

4. Writing your task: When you do a practice test I suggest you time yourself – 1 hour for the whole writing exam or 40 minutes for an essay and 20 minutes for a Task 1. Part of the reason for doing practice writing tests is to push yourself to complete the task within the required time.

5. I will usually send back your task with corrections and feedback within 24 hours.

6. Review your essay and you are welcome to ask questions if anything is unclear.

Sample of an essay that was submitted for IELTS Writing Correction
Question: Although many benefits may result from space exploration, the costs involved are enormous. There is some debate as to whether this money could be more wisely spent to provide for the basic needs of mankind such as food, clean water, contraception etc. for this reason space exploration should be restricted,
To what extent do you agree?
Student’s Answer:

IELTS writing correction

Feedback from IELTS tutor

Suggested Next Steps:

1. Grammar is a serious issue, you need to work on singular/plural, articles, and verb endings. I suggest you go to my grammar page.

2. Work on connecting more of your simple sentences together to create more compound and complex sentences. An excellent site that explains sentence parts and allows you to do practice quizzes is at http://esl.about.com/od/intermediatewriting/a/cplex_sentence

Criteria Feedback

Task response

6

 Well structured and addresses all parts of the question.

 Arguments relate well to the question. Logical conclusion based on arguments.

 Over 350 words, write less and use the extra time to check your answer

Cohesion and coherence

6

 Wide range of connectors used: furthermore, in addition etc. Clear progression of argument.

 However, the high frequency of errors with language interferes with the coherence

Vocabulary

5

 Some level 7 words like: phenomenon,nethertheless, but frequent errors with word choices (e.g. “emergent”)

 Many errors with verb endings

Grammar

5

 Too many short simple sentences

 Confusion of singular and plural

 Errors with articles, especially missing out “the”

overall

5.5

 You have good arguments to support your point of view and your essay is well structured.

 Some use of high level vocabulary. Nethertheless, High frequency of grammatical and lexical error limit the quality of your response.

 

More samples of Writing I Corrected

Samples of IELTS writing tasks that I’ve corrected are included here to help your preparation. These include essays, reports, and letters. I have corrected thousands of IELTS tasks. By reading the tasks I have corrected you can understand some of the common errors that are made in the test and also get ideas about how to write essays.

Essay with problems with task response and cohesion and coherence

pdf version

Essay with a contradictory opinion

pdf version

 

Powerpoint about why you should use my correction service

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68 Responses

  1. sevens

    I used this correction service and found it very useful. The feedback is detailed and given for all four grading criteria. I think it is helpful to have your writing checked by someone who is an examiner.

    1. mahmoudalgohari444

      hi,
      i have two things
      1- shall i send my essay handwritten or computer written
      2- 30$ package will cover 4 task for each task . which mean total 8 tasks ( 4 letters and 4 essays )
      or will cover only 4 tasks , what ever it is

      thanks

      1. MikeAdmin

        1. You can handwrite and send photos or type them
        2. Any four tasks…for example 1x task-one 3 x task-two [note that it takes about 20 minutes for me to do ONE task]

  2. Chan Nguyen

    Dear students, I have been studying with Mike for 2 months and his advise is very helpful and I love to study with him. With his speaking session, I see my English completely improve and feel confident to prepare for IELTS

    1. MikeAdmin

      There is no expiry date for sending tasks. Even two years later is OK!. You can also transfer credit to a friend if
      you do not write all your tasks.

  3. mark

    Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money.
    Do you agree or disagree?
    Which other types of job should be highly paid?

    There is a belief that celebrities like actors and footballers are overpaid. I disagree with this notion because they give back to society and many offer free mentorship.

    Many celebrities run non-governmental organization like charity organization and welfare groups. They build old people’s homes, gives scholarship and look after the less privileged ones in the society. All these requires funding. Therefore, their pay cheque should be large enough. This will ensure sufficient funds for them and their loved ones and the surplus will be used for their charity work. If they are under paid, they will barely have much for themselves to talk of helping the needy.

    Also, their position as public figure makes people look up to them as role models. They cannot adequately discharge this duty if they are poorly paid. They will be struggling to meet up with their day to day needs. Time for seminars, talk shows and television & radio programs will never be there. High salary package will enable them take time off work periodically to mentor, motivate, advise, and guide their fans that look up to them with great respect and admiration.

    However, there are other disciplines that should equally be lucrative. Medicals personnel’s and security officers should also earn high income. Medicals personnel’s saves lives. Proper healthcare service is imperative for any society that wants a healthy population. Health cannot be compromised thus the saying “health is wealth”. In addition, security officers risk their lives to protect the society. They work when others are sleeping. They are always exempted from public holidays. Many crime-fighting officials have lost their lives while combating crime. Their hard work and dedication to work should adequately be rewarded with a humper salary.

    In conclusion, I disagree that celebrities are overpaid because they give back to the society and many are mentored by them. Furthermore, health and security officers should be adequately take care of because they offer indispensable services to humanity.

    1. MikeAdmin

      1. The introduction of the essay only introduces the first question and not the second one about other types of jobs that also deserve higher salaries.
      2. Paragraph 2 needs to start with a linking phrase such as “the main reason why I believe the huge salaries are justified is because…”
      3. Paragraph 2 has a relatively weak main idea. Some celebrities may be involved in welfare but many aren’t… And I don’t think it’s a great argument that high salaries should be paid so that they can support these charity organisations… People could just pay the money directly to the charities of their choice.
      4. Paragraph 3 doesn’t really have an overly convincing main idea either. Your idea seems to be that they need high salaries so they have time off to do media appearances. This doesn’t seem to be a great reason and also by doing media appearances they would probably be paid millions of dollars to do these anyway!
      5. With regards to question two about other occupations that deserve high salaries, you seem to have a reasonable response to this question.

      Overall I would estimate your score is as follows
      TASK RESPONSE=6: you have responded to the task but your arguments are weak and unconvincing.
      COHESION AND COHERENCE =6: the introduction does not introduce both questions, and paragraph 2 doesn’t have a great topic sentence. Also, I would put it both of your responses to question one and the same paragraph, so that you have one paragraph for each question.
      VOCABULARY = seven: plenty of high-level language such as lucrative, exempted, and adequately discharge. I think where you wrote “humper salaries” you mean “bumper salaries”

      GRAMMAR=7: a good range of sentence structures had been written, but there are a fair few errors with grammar throughout the task.
      Please note: this is just a free assessment to help the student. Paid assessments include corrections of all vocabulary and grammatical mistakes and more feedback on each of the four grading criteria. If you look on the webpage above you can see an example of this.

  4. Raana

    Hi, I am a doctor. I have given ilets twice and each time got 6.5 in writing. I had a very bad experience on paying for online practice and it didn’t work for me at all.
    I am desperately need good guidance for my writing tasks. I have already booked my ielts for 8/july.
    Pleasd guide me..

    1. MikeAdmin

      I understand your situation. I offer a money back guarantee if you are unsatisfied with any of my services.
      I am an IELTS examiner and I have been offering my correction service for five years now. I will send you an email with more details.

  5. Komal

    Hello,
    Can you please guide me the amount I have to pay if I want only 2 tasks to be analysed? General-Task 1 and Task 2

    1. MikeAdmin

      I suggest you send your tasks one at a time, so that you can use the feedback from each task to improve the subsequent task.

    1. MikeAdmin

      Sure, when they are appropriate. For instance, If you are asked for YOUR opinion, you should give it using the personal pronoun “I”

      1. I was told that im better off using personal pronounes, for example : discuss both views and give your opinion : it is argued that the internet can be a dangerous way of using credit cards online, although using the internet might bring few disadvantages, it is undeniably a convenient way to purchase goods due to so and so.. Im expressing my opinion in here without using I.

        1. MikeAdmin

          1. “it is argued” is NOT giving your opinion, it is giving other people’s. Use the pronoun “I” to give YOUR opinion.

          2. It is not an “undeniable way”! Sometimes buying online is a hassle, and I believe it’s much easier to buy something in the 7-11.

    1. MikeAdmin

      Hi, the procedure is below. Please let me know if anything is unclear:
      Process for correction
      1. Make a payment for my IELTS writing correction. Four tasks for $30:
      http://www.ieltsanswers.com/payment-ielts.html
      2. Email me your writing task. This can be in the following formats: ms-word, pdf, photo of a handwritten task. I suggest you send your tasks one at a time, so that you can use the feedback from each task to improve the subsequent task.
      examiner@ieltsanswers.com
      3. Choosing Tasks. You can select your own task questions or choose them from here:
      4. Writing your task: When you do a practice test I suggest you time yourself – 1 hour for the whole writing exam or 40 minutes for an essay and 20 minutes for a Task 1. Part of the reason for doing practice writing tests is to push yourself to complete the task within the required time.
      5. I will usually send back your task with corrections and feedback within 24 hours.
      6. Review your essay and you are welcome to ask questions if anything is unclear.

    1. MikeAdmin

      Hi, I don’t really have a bulk discount scheme. It takes me about 20 minutes to correct each one and having more doesn’t enable me to
      check them any quicker.

    1. MikeAdmin

      Process for correction

      1. Make a payment for my IELTS writing correction. Four tasks for $30:

      http://www.ieltsanswers.com/payment-ielts.html

      2. Email me your writing task. This can be in the following formats: ms-word, pdf, photo of a handwritten task. I suggest you send your tasks one at a time, so that you can use the feedback from each task to improve the subsequent task.

      examiner@ieltsanswers.com

      3. Choosing Tasks. You can select your own task questions or choose them from here:

      4. Writing your task: When you do a practice test I suggest you time yourself – 1 hour for the whole writing exam or 40 minutes for an essay and 20 minutes for a Task 1. Part of the reason for doing practice writing tests is to push yourself to complete the task within the required time.

      5. I will usually send back your task with corrections and feedback within 24 hours.

      6. Review your essay and you are welcome to ask questions if anything is unclear.

  6. Giang Bui

    Hi Mike, your educational page is very helpful and I’m very interested in your service. I would like to know more information about my current level in writing! If you could help…

    Task 2: The increase in people’s life expectancy means that they have to work older to pay for their retirement. One alternative is that people start to work at a younger age. Is this alternative a positive or negative development?

    With the progression of advanced technology these days, humans tend to live longer. It means they have to work older to pay for retirement. To tackle this phenomenon, it has been suggested that youngsters should draw up their plan working as soon in their lifetime as possible. Although the bare fact is that working at a younger age could help relieve burdens on workers at aspects of finance, I totally disagree with the idea that it is a positive development.
    On the one hand, financial burdens might be relieved temporarily when we start career to make a living at the early stage of life, but labours would not gain benefits in the long run. For example, an accountant can use her early income to pay her retirement, nevetherless she is also under tax burden and work pressure for a longer time that may cause stress, apathy and boredom.
    At the same time, relevant expertise means longer duration of training, and starting work at early period of life is a waste of time. For example, a mechanic need to take time to acquire basic knowledge and technical skills relating to physics, maths, etc. at a vocational school before beginning his career to solve several complex problems that even a long experienced worker without sufficient training could not deal with. Furthermore, some occupations like medicine, architecture can not shorten the time needed to finish a course, so definitely it makes the idea of working at early age unreasonable.
    In conclusion, there remains drawbacks that mentioned above, I thus accept that getting a foot in the door at early age is a negative development. Therefore, this trend would not be expected in the near future.

    1. MikeAdmin

      As a quick assessment, I think you are probably around level 7.
      There are a couple of problems with this essay that will likely prevent this.

      PARAGRAPH 2 introduces the idea that the benefit would be in the short-term and not the longer term, but this is not supported by the example, which instead has the negative point of stress.

      PARAGRAPH 3 could make the point more clearly in the topic sentence that “starting work earlier will lead to less time in education and therefore less qualified and knowledgeable employees”

      Note that I offer a service to give full corrections of your task along with a band score for each of the four grading criteria.
      http://www.ieltsanswers.com/writing-correction-ielts.html

  7. sameer

    “Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other “
    To what extent do you agree with this idea?

    It is often argued that there is always a good side associated with tourism as it helps people of different nations or regions to understand each other. This may be true to certain extent however, I am of the opinion that tourism has some darker side too, particularly cultural disharmony and smuggling .
    [you say it may be true to some extent, but the question requires you to specify the extent = say how much you agree]

    [the topic sentence below should make it clear whether the paragraph is about agreeing or disageeing…I can guess it is disageeing]
    People of certain regions are concerned about preservation of their indigenous culture. Tourists play a role in adulteration of culture by slowly and steadily bringing new changes to the local culture. For example, in Kashmir a state in India, a survey revealed that interracial marriages are on rise from past ten years due to parallel increase in number of visiting tourists.

    It has also been seen that smugglers and thieves in the garb of tourists visit a place which is a popular tourist destination in order to sell drugs and loot rich people. This has a bad impact on local people, as many a times local youth also get involved in these crimes. For instance, there is a 10% increase in crimes done by young people in Kashmir. [totally inappropriate to give a percentage here…where did this percentage come from?]

    To conclude, although tourism brings many good things such as economic growth and understanding of different cultures, but there is always a bad side attached to it which needs to be taken care of
    [unclear the extent that you agree AND you must not present new ideas in the conclusion that were not covered in the body of the esasy]

    TR = 5 no clear opinion
    CC = 6 no clear opinion in the introduction or conclusion. Topic sentences do not clearly state what the paragraph is about
    [not assessing vocabulary or grammar]
    Full assessment available here: http://www.ieltsanswers.com/writing-correction-ielts.html

  8. ICP

    Hi Mike,

    I have done Ielts 4 times and each time got only 6.5 in writing. In your experience what I might be doing wrong ?. also I’m interested in getting your correction service, but I’m concern about payment security.

    1. MikeAdmin

      1. payment is done by a 3rd party called getdpd.com they are very secure. If you prefer I can give you my bank account number in Taiwan or Australia
      and you can pay direct.

      2. if you are doing well in other parts of the exam it is likely that your vocabulary and grammar are good enough, which means that you are probably losing marks due to poor task response or a poor structure for your writing [Coherence and Cohesion:] see more about the grading here: http://www.ieltsanswers.com/writing-grading-ielts.html

      1. ICP

        Thanks Mike, Just want to clarify again that you will accept scanned hand written answers as well ? I think that will be the most close to exam conditions. what happen after I make the payment. I’m planning to use Paypal

  9. sameer

    Solving environment problems should be the responsibility of an international organization rather than each national government. Do you agree or disagree?

    It is often argued that a global organization should be responsible to tackle environmental issues than authorities of individual nations or regions. I completely agree with this statement due the fact that environmental problems do not respect borders and need financial support at an international level.
    Environmental changes such as global warming are not restricted to a particular region. It is thus impossible to solve these kind of problems by a local organization. It requires meeting and discussion at an international political and scientific platform. For example, a recent meet held at Texas University in USA issued a notice which directed people across the globe to plant more tress and use biodegradable products in order to safeguard environment.
    Poor countries most often suffer from environmental disasters and require financial aid from international community to solve the problem. Local organizations can help but often lack finances to do so. For instance, there should be pooling of money by different countries which could be channelled as per needs of a particular region by an international organization.
    To conclude, although national organizations are necessary but the main responsibility lies on the shoulders of an international organization due to global nature of environment problems and an economic gap between different regions.

    1. MikeAdmin

      Solving environment problems should be the responsibility of an international organization rather than each national government. Do you agree or disagree?
      It is often argued that a global organization should be responsible to tackle environmental issues RATHER than THE authorities of individual nations or regions. I completely agree with this statement due the fact that environmental problems do not respect borders and need financial support at an international level.

      Environmental changes such as global warming are not restricted to a particular region. It is thus impossible to solve these kindS of problems by a local organization. It requires meeting and discussion at an international political and scientific platform. For example, a recent meetING held at Texas University in THE USA issued a notice which directed people across the globe to plant more tress and use biodegradable products in order to safeguard environment. [did it have any effect? The example could more clearly illustrate the point you are making by talking about the effect]
      [unclear WHY poor countries suffer the most]
      Poor countries most often suffer from environmental disasters and require financial aid from the international community to solve the problem. Local organizations can help but often lack finances to do so. [For instance] THEREFORE, there should be pooling of money by different countries which could be channelled as per needs of a particular region by an international organization.

      To conclude, although national organizations are necessary [but] the main responsibility lies on the shoulders of an international organization due to global nature of environmentAL problems and an economic gap between different regions.
      TR: 7
      CC: 7
      V: 8
      G:7

  10. Rupesh Sagar Betha

    Hi Mike,
    1. How to know that payment was done at your end
    2. How to make the payment for essay corrections
    3. How to mail an essay for correction purpose

    Please tell me the details for the following to the mail id rupeshbetha@gmail.com. I am going to take my exam in november. As this is my second time i would like to get high score. Kindly do the needful

    1. MikeAdmin

      Yes, sure. I will give some brief feedback, but not as full as with the paid service.
      I will mostly focus on your task response and overall structure.

    1. MikeAdmin

      I’m sorry I do not know such person. I suggest you look on google or facebook.
      Try to find someone who is a current or past examiner.

  11. Rupesh Sagar Betha

    Hi Mike,
    In response to your mail I am sending one essay for correction purpose. Please leave your suggestion for the essay.

    Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both and give your opinion.

    Now a day’s deforestation, pollution and food waste are creating a lot of problems to plants and animal kingdom all around the world. It is argued by some that this process may not be stopped while, others believe that by taking some precautions this situation can be changed, in My opinion, I believe that despite there being extinction of species caused by human activities but, it is better to take some steps on order to have mutual benefits.

    It is often argued that the process human acts cannot be stopped to fulfill his basic needs. Every human being in this world gets shelter and food through plants and animal but because of increased activities their population is tremendously declining. For instance, a recent study conducted by national biological survey of India revealed that 90% of tigers in forests got extinct due to unstoppable human movements. Being without depending on plants and animals human race cannot survive.

    On the other hand, by making some good protocols we can overcome this negative problem and have more benefits. Using public transport instead of private vehicles can minimize the effect of pollution as a result use of fossil fuels will decrease and global warming can be minimized. Additionally, using alternative sources instead of wood can also fix the problem of deforestation. For example, recently USA started using of green energy instead of using coal for generating electricity, they replaced solar cells and wind for producing power. By strictly following these steps humans can have more benefits without disturbing biodiversity.

    In conclusion, although continuous exploitation by humans to fulfill basic needs is highly atrocious and resulting in extinction of plants and animals but, by taking some changes like using alternate sources and by using less amount of fossil fuels there will be mutual benefits and the biodiversity can be balanced.

    Thanks and regards,
    Rupesh Sagar Betha

  12. Waqas Arif

    Hi Mike, I am very happy by seeing the feedback which all are in favor of the correction service. I would like to buy this service but I want to purchase 40 tasks.together because I want to get a significant discount. One more thing is that I have got 6.5 in writing which is not full filling the demands of immigration that is why I am required to achieve eight bands in each component. In listening and reading I have got 8.5 even though in speaking I have got 7 but all the time in writing I get 6.5 or sometimes less than that. My module is General Training. If you are able to help me in securing eight score in writing component both in task 1 and task 2 , then I will be interested to purchase the tasks in a bulk quantity.

    Please quote your final price

    Your immediate response will be highly appreciated

    1. MikeAdmin

      Hi Waqas, I am going to send you email regarding discounts for ielts writing correction. Note also that I have a mock speaking service and I will also email you details about that.

  13. zeeshan

    Some people think that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries bring many positive developments. Others say it can cause the loss of national identities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    It is argued by many that cross border trade and cultural blending between different nations has many advantages, while others believe it causes a country to loose it’s identity.This essay will discuss that although indigenous cultures may get abraded, but overall, economic growth and elimination of racist mindset supervenes.

    On the one hand, the inherent cultures of a particular country may be overshadowed by free trade and close cultural contacts between countries. This may lead to loss of identity. For example, Yoga a form of exercise and meditation was prevalent in India before British rule. However, now most people in India are unaware of this and are more adapted towards western form of exercise like cycling and jogging.

    On the other hand, increasing business and mingling of cultures is a boom for local economy and understanding of different cultures. Many products are exported and a substantial amount of profit is made. This is possible only by allowing trade at an international level across borders. Additionally, by working with people of different skin colour across the globe, the ancient racial mindset is overcomed . For instance, Africa a predominant black country is the largest exporter of diamonds.

    To conclude, although there are many pros and cons of close cultural contact and trade between countries, i tend to believe that the merits in terms of economy and building of harmony among different races are certainly more.

    1. MikeAdmin

      Some people think that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries bring many positive developments. Others say it can cause the loss of national identities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

      It is argued by many that cross border trade and cultural blending between different nations has many advantages, while others believe it causes a country to loose it’s identity.This essay will discuss that although indigenous cultures may get abraded, but [YOU CAN NOT HAVE BUT HERE BECAUSE OF although EARLIER IN THE SENTENCE] overall, economic growth and elimination of racist mindset supervenes.

      On the one hand, the inherent cultures of a particular country may be overshadowed by free trade [INACCURATE REPHRASE OF THE TOPIC AS THIS IS TOO SPECIFIC…THE TOPIC DOES NOT MENTION FREE TRADE] and close cultural contacts between countries. This may lead to loss of identity. For example, yoga, a form of exercise and meditation was prevalent in India before British rule. However, now most people in India are unaware of this [REALLY/ I THINK MOST PEOPLE KNOW ABOUT YOGA!!!] and are more adapted towards western forms of exercise like cycling and jogging.

      On the other hand, increasing business and mingling of cultures is a boom for local economyIES and understanding of different cultures. Many products are exported and a substantial amount of profit is made. This is possible only by allowing trade at an international level across borders. Additionally, by working with people of different skin colourS across the globe, the ancient racial mindset is overcomed . For instance, Africa a predominantly black country is the largest exporter of diamonds. [AND? YOUR EXAMPLE DOES NOT ILLUSTRATE HOW “the ancient racial mindset is overcome”]

      To conclude, although there are many pros and cons of close cultural contact and trade between countries, i tend to believe that the merits in terms of THE economy and building of harmony among different races are certainly more. [WHY? YOU NEED TO JUSTIFY YOUR OPINION HERE, WHICH MAY BE A SUMMARY OF THE MAIN POINTS YOU MADE IN THE ESSAY]

      Task Response
      6-7
      250 -320 words

      [INACCURATE REPHRASE OF THE TOPIC AS THIS IS TOO SPECIFIC…THE TOPIC DOES NOT MENTION FREE TRADE]

      YOU NEED TO JUSTIFY YOUR OPINION, WHICH MAY BE A SUMMARY OF THE MAIN POINTS YOU MADE IN THE ESSAY]

      YOUR EXAMPLE DOES NOT ILLUSTRATE HOW “the ancient racial mindset is overcome”]
      The three main Types of essays

      Cohesion and Coherence
      7 good overall structure

      The last sentence of the first paragraph does not clearly introduce the essay is about both views and your opinion

      topic sentences introduce paragraphs well

      paragraphs focus on a single idea

      logical paragraph development
      YOUR EXAMPLE DOES NOT ILLUSTRATE HOW “the ancient racial mindset is overcome”]
      linking phrases are used well

      Vocabulary
      8 appropriate word choices

      Grammar
      8

      sentence structures are correct
      YOU CAN NOT HAVE BUT HERE BECAUSE OF although EARLIER IN THE SENTENCE]
      a variety of sentence structures are used

      punctuation is correct

      Overall
      7.0-7.5

  14. chathu

    Q))Some people think that government should spend money on training athletics. While other people think that government should provide training for general public.

    It is considered by some that government ought to spend money on training of athletics where other people believe that government should spend money for training for whole population. In my opinion I believe that movement should spend on Athletics for Nation’s reputation at the same time they need to spend general public as well.

    On the one hand, Government need to spend money on athletics because they are very valuable people in the country, Government can provide better sports equipment for athletics to enhance their skill levels to go for international competition. For an example, athletics can bring reputation to nation when they play for international sports. It will also enhance the country’s economy as well.

    On the other hand, some are believe that government can spend money on training for whole population. They can provide more benefits to adults and school children. Especially it will reduce health problems such as obesity and weight gain. Without daily exercising people are becoming unhealthier and if the government can provide more sports facilities by providing sports items to old generation they will get benefit out of it. In addition that if the school children get in to sports since from their childhood they can enhance their career though sports. As a result they will get more training by using better quality facilities. These are best paths for government to provide their money on country’s future.

    In conclusion, I believe that government need to facilitate more money on athletics training as well as providing facilities for whole generation as well.

  15. Abid

    Some people believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

    Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages ?

    It is argued by many authorities that the best time to initiate for students to imbibe [BAD WORD CHOICE] in a foreign language is at a primary school level rather than delaying it to a secondary school level. This essay will discuss that despite younger primary school children fail to understand the importance of learning a foreign language, the advantages in terms of curiosity and stress free primary school life are certainly more .

    [Your topic sentence below does not have a key point to it. You mention curiosity, but the realpoint seems to about it being EASIER]
    Younger minds are more curious to know about different things. This holds true for language also. If students are exposed to the culture and stumbling blocks of learning a foreign language at an early age, it becomes easy for them at a later stage. For example , a recent survey at oxford university found that almost ninety percent of successful learners of foreign language had started at a primary school level. In addition, the academic stress on primary school children is less than that of students of secondary school. As a result, they are able to give more time to learn a foreign language as compared to their peers in secondary school who are more busy in career building goals.

    You should use a word like “however” to start the sentence
    Primary school students may not understand the importance of learning a foreign language. This may prove harmful in terms of both consumption of resources to train them and also is a waste of time for them. For instance, the finances involved may be drifted towards sports.

    To conclude, although foreign language can be learnt at a secondary school level also, however the benefits clearly overshadow the disadvantages of learning it at a primary school level.
    You should summarise the main points from the body here and perhaps explain why the benefits outweigh the disadvantages.

    Task Response 6:
    You seem to think that the topic is about studying at primary school or secondary school but it’s about when to start… A student may start at elementary school and then still be studying the same language in secondary school
    Cohesion and Coherence 6:
    topic sentences do not introduce paragraphs well
    Vocabulary 6-7
    Grammar 7
    Overall 6.5

  16. Ricky

    Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

    It is argued that with the development of technology, students are now able to look for information through internet, so the library will soon be disappeared. While I agree that online resources have many advantages, I believe that libraries cannot be completely replaced.
    There are several benefits of using internet to access information. One benefit is that it is truly convenient for users. They solely need an internet connection and an electronic device to look for the information at any time, unlike library where people can only visit at certain time. Another benefit is the internet has a huge range of resources which none of libraries in the world can compare with. So, even students in a developed countries or rural areas can be eligible to access the newest information that they cannot find at their local public services.
    On the other hand, the library has its own unique characteristics that the internet does not have. The first one is the ambition. In a survey from Harvard University, a large number of students answered that they spend most of their time to study at the library, because it is a quiet place and they can concentrate on their task easier than when studying at home or other places. Secondly, the materials at libraries are creditable and be selected by trusted staffs. While on the internet, everyone can write and post the information, so some sources are more likely not to be used in doing research. For example, Wikipedia is one of the largest online encyclopedia, but students are prohibited to use the articles on this website due to the unverified information.
    In conclusion, despite the benefits of accessing information online, I would argue that libraries will still exist.

    Could you please evaluate my essay? just score is enough. I am going to take general test on 16 december, do u think after 4 or 8 tasks I can get band 7 in writing? Thank you

    1. MikeAdmin

      I believe you can quickly get to 7 if you can learn to respond to tasks in the correct way. I suggest you have a look here:
      http://www.ieltsanswers.com/planning-ielts-essay.html

      Task Response 6 Since you believe that libraries can’t be replaced you should not bother to write a paragraph about the advantages of the Internet. Instead you should be giving reasons why libraries can’t be replaced

      For your third paragraph, AMBITION does not seem to make sense or to be explained well enough. Your second point about the reliability of information is valid but you should argue more persuasively “libraries are needed because of the reliability of information they provide”
      Cohesion and Coherence 6 There seems to be no justification for writing paragraph 2. Iour conclusion should summarise the main ideas from the body of the essay.
      Vocabulary 6-7
      Grammar 7
      Overall 6-6.5

  17. Ankit

    Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. Do you agree or disagree?

    Prison sentence for people committing crimes is the not the most effective method of tackling the problem. However, there are alternative ways like education and job training to deal with them [rephrase given words more]. In my opinion, i agree that considering other options instead of imprisonment for criminals are benificial for both individual and the society

    A good reason behind prefering education over prison is that this will make them literate and a responsible citizen of the country. As a result, they will be able to differentiate between good and bad, also they will be well worsed versed with the consequences they may face upon committing a crime. At present, people violate laws without knowing the harmful imapcts it may cause upon them and through education this problem can be sorted out

    Another way of handling criminals is by training them in some work like carpenting, gardening and many more. This helps them in diverting their minds from committing heinous crimes. Moreover, learning new skills will help them to earn a living for themselves, so job training is an effective way to cope up with criminals

    Finally, opting fot for better ways than sending them in to prison will bring benifits to society too. More educated people means less crime, in other words, if criminals become literate and law abiding citizens then, consequently, the rate of criminal activity will be reduced. Hence, people will feel more comfortable whether in or out of their homes

    In conclusion, I believe that as far as offenders are concerned, taking up other options are much viable and benificial beneficial than imprisonment. The Government should consider alternative ways for criminals for the betterment of society.

    Please evaluate this task . I have an exam on 2nd dec. will i be able to score 7???
    Yes
    TR=7
    CC=7
    LR =7
    GRA=7

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