Writing Task 1 question

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Since the second paragraph is about the overview, is it okay to write the data in the following paragraph with the trend in the overview?
Or should I only write about things that haven’t been mentioned before?
(I wanted to illustrate the overall trend with data in the third paragraph but it seems I’m repeating)

Also, I’m wondering what kind of level of paraphrasing I should achieve.
For example, I wrote task 1 about percentages, and I only used the words “percentages” and “proportions”.

Thank you in advance!

[MikeAdmin]

1. I prefer putting the overview at the end of the first paragraph to orm ONE solid paragraph instead of two “thin” ones
2. Don’t write too long an overview; a maximum of two sentences.
3. It is OK to repeat information from the overview, but it’s even better to avoid it.
4. As for your question about paraphrasing, I have a fantastic answer from CHAT GPT:

Below is a detailed list of ways to paraphrase or vary the terms “percentages” and “proportions”, including their appropriate contexts:

🔹 Synonyms and Variations for “Percentages”
Per cent / Per centage
Example: “The percentage of students enrolling increased.”
➤ “The per cent of students enrolling rose.”

Share
Example: “A high percentage of revenue came from tourism.”
➤ “A large share of revenue came from tourism.”

Portion (context-dependent)
Example: “30% of the population were under 18.”
➤ “A significant portion of the population were under 18.”

Fraction (if context is mathematical or approximate)
Example: “60% of respondents agreed.”
➤ “Nearly two-thirds of respondents agreed.”

Figure (when referring to data values)
Example: “The percentage fell from 75% to 60%.”
➤ “The figure dropped from 75 to 60.”

Rate (especially in demographic or economic data)
Example: “The percentage of employment rose steadily.”
➤ “The employment rate increased steadily.”

Statistic / Statistical figure
Example: “The percentage of car ownership grew.”
➤ “This statistic increased over time.”

Level (often used in informal descriptions or overviews)
Example: “The percentage was higher among women.”
➤ “The level was higher among female participants.”

🔹 Synonyms and Variations for “Proportions”
Fraction
Example: “A large proportion of energy was from renewables.”
➤ “A large fraction of the energy came from renewable sources.”

Segment
Example: “A small proportion of sales were online.”
➤ “A small segment of sales occurred online.”

Part / Section
Example: “The highest proportion came from Asia.”
➤ “The largest part came from Asia.”

Component / Element
Example: “The smallest proportion was food expenses.”
➤ “Food was the smallest component of expenditure.”

Division (used when comparing among categories)
Example: “The proportions of age groups varied.”
➤ “The division among age groups varied considerably.”

Ratio (for direct comparisons between two values)
Example: “The proportion of men to women was 3:2.”
➤ “The ratio of men to women was 3 to 2.”

Make up / Account for (verb paraphrase)
Example: “Older people formed a small proportion.”
➤ “Older people accounted for a small part of the total.”

Constituted / Represented
Example: “Seniors made up 25% of the population.”
➤ “Seniors constituted one-quarter of the population.”

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