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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Comments about the task:
1.A both sides and opinion essay
2.The topic is about who should design buildings rather than who should actually build them

Plan:
Builders can decide on their own:
1.They have the talent
2.It will lead to more diversity in city appearances

Governments should decide
1.Safety
2.verall town planning

Model Answer:
There are those who have the belief the authorities should retain control and oversight over the planning process associated with constructing any new building in large metropolises while the alternative stance is that those who fund the projects should have free reign over the blueprints. This essay discusses both sides of this contentious argument and then I will give my own perspective which is that the authorities must retain control of the process.

Many people argue that companies building projects should be free to design buildings as they wish. One of the reasons for this is that they often have the expertise to design buildings well. For instance, they often employ leading architects to design stylish buildings for them. Another reason is to allow buildings in an area to have a distinctive flavour and to not be constrained by governmental regulations that may result in a cookie-cutter approach to building. An example of this style of building can be found in Beijing where whole suburbs look identical.

Others argue that governments should safeguard the general public’s interests and regulate the design of buildings accordingly. More often than not, they have records of areas affected by disasters throughout history and will establish design standards that can ensure buildings can withstand just about every anticipated natural disaster, such as earthquakes and floods. In addition, if governments review the decisions about a building’s design, the whole town planning and a more holistic approach can be considered as a part of the decision. More specifically they consider how the design of a particular building fits in with the other buildings and facilities in an area.

In conclusion, I believe both sides of the argument have their merits. However, on balance I believe that the government’s involvement is essential; as I feel it will ensure safety issues are not being violated and whole cities have some sort of overall plan in their design. [317words]

Language:
burgeoning =  increasing
contentious argument = controversial or heated argument
perspective = viewpoint
architects  = designers of buildings
distinctive flavour = unique flavour
constrained = limited
regulations = rules
cookie-cutter approach = an approach of designing things exactly the same
safeguard = protect
town planning = design of a whole town or city
violated =disobeyed

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10 thoughts on “model-essay-CRIME-LAWS-1.html”

  1. the authorities. in the first sentence in the introduction. I fell you need to omit “the”
    have records of areas . second paragraph second line. I feel that you have add “the” records
    history. second paragraph second line. i feel it needs the before history
    such as. second paragraph third line. it takes coma before such as
    as part of. second paragraph forth line. part needs a before it

    1. 1. “the authorities” is okay… This is referring to particular authorities… In this case it’s implied that this is something like the government. 2. “the areas” is okay but not needed. 3.”the history” is okay but not needed. 4. I’ve put a comma before “such as” as you suggested.I’ve put “a” before part as you suggested. Thanks for your suggestions.

  2. Hello Sir, I have a question regarding the “Two sides and opinion essay”. Is it advantageous to give the argument which fits my opinion first or better secondly? Thank you so much and thanks in general for all your very much helpful tips.

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