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Sample IELTS Letters Corrected

Samples of IELTS letters that I’ve corrected for students are included here to help your preparation.

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You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much.

Write a letter to the restaurant to thank them.

  • Mention the food, service and the atmosphere.
  • Also suggest any improvements to make things better. Dear Sir or Madam, I recently threw a party for my birthday at your restaurant, and I am writing to express my gratitude for the remarkable food and service that we received.Last week, I saw your restaurant’s advertisement about the special birthday parties and after musing upon the other options, I decided to go ahead with your restaurant. As soon as we entered the restaurant, we were warmly greeted by yourgenial staff members, who also took our coats and jackets, and guided us towards the seats that we had reserved. After finalizing what we want to eat, we ordered shrimp fried rice, chop suey, and some soft drinks.The service was prompt, as we did not have to wait for more than 5 minutes. The food served was not only delicious but also smelled great, and the atmosphere was made even more enjoyable by the string quartet playing in the background. All in all, as ardent gourmets that my friends and I are, we were not disappointed, and we thoroughly reveled.

[An excellent answer to the second bullet point because you covered all the requirements= food service and atmosphere]

Before I sign off this letter, I just wanted to put forward a recommendation to make the experience of dining at your restaurant even livelier. I felt that the temperature inside the restaurant was a bit cold, perhaps you should consider installing an electric heater to keep the temperature warm.

[The third point is not responded to fully. You are asked to suggest improvements, but you only made one.]Good luck,
Yours sincerely,
Sam Smith [you absolutely must write your surname for a formal letter]

[224 words…seems a bit too long to finish comfortably on time] 

Estimated 

Grade

 

Task achievement

 

5

A six requires you to respond to all the bullet points fully. You do not fully respond to the third bullet point because you only mentioned one improvement and the question asked for a improvements. This may seem harsh but this is the score you will get if you do not fully respond to a bullet point. The valuable lesson here is you must note that the bullet point asks for improvements [plural], and you only suggested one.

There is also a problem with the tone of the letter it’s a formal letter so you must write your surname

Sam Smith [you absolutely must write your surname for a formal letter

 

Cohesion and Coherence

 

8

The purpose of the letter is clear

 Each paragraph has a clear main point

 

Vocabulary

 

9

Only one error

All in all, as ardent gourmets that my friends and I are

A wide range of vocabulary is shown. I have highlighted the words I particularly liked in yellow.

 

Grammar

 

9

Errors with sentence structure

The service was prompt, as we did not have to wait for more than 5 minutes. The food served was not only delicious but also smelled great, and the atmosphere was made even more enjoyable by the string quartet playing in the background. 

 

Overall

 

7.5

Overall =31/4 = 7.75=7.5 [rounded down]

This is an excellent letter the only problems are:

1. You did not respond fully to the third bullet point.

2. You didn’t write your surname.